Wednesday, February 22, 2006

LABELS


I Want To


be the breadwinner
win bread I want to
bread the win and start
again I want to dust
the counter with flour
knead with knuckles
wait for rising.

stay-at-home and write
write the home win
the bread with writing
clean the counter
for the dusting
flip the pan
gold dome in hand.

5 Comments:

Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Had to read this several times. Like the line breaks, interspersed with rhyme. Excellent poem!!

8:50 AM, February 24, 2006  
Blogger J.B. Rowell said...

Thanks Pat - it is a jumble - but so are the labels/roles we take on . . .

8:44 PM, February 25, 2006  
Blogger Rae Pater said...

Hey, I really like this!

Would you like to take part in the feminist project I mentioned on my blog? This would be a great feminist statement!
If you're interested let me know and I'll email you the details.

11:53 PM, February 25, 2006  
Blogger J.B. Rowell said...

Thanks Rae - I'd love to part of the feminist project - send the info! I think this needs work, and I got some good feedback today in a workshop and I may end up having another stanza and I need to deal with the "I" in the first stanza and no "I" in the second . . .

5:50 PM, February 26, 2006  
Blogger Rae Pater said...

I've sent the info. Let me know if you don't get it.

10:10 PM, February 26, 2006  

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